I'm struck at how lyrical the poem is, with several internal rhymes. It has great movement, vivid imagery -- what powerful memory after all these years. Maybe there is more here?
I love playing with internal rhyme, though I don't want it to be obvious. And your instincts match mine, Ronnie—I feel drawn to the possibilities in that long ago time in Belize. We'll see what (if anything) comes forward.
Transporting, and makes me wonder and brings me to the feeling of awe. What would happen if they wander away or return in the morning in a different order 😊
Maybe houses on legs are an archetype of sorts....reminded me of Baba Yaga's house on chicken legs. I think it danced around, or turned in circles. I was fascinated as a child by that story as interpreted in Mussorgsky's "Pictures at an Exhibition". Now there's something to explore!
Splendid !
Thank you, Marie. You ever been to Belize?
Oooh, love your poetic images! What a cherished memory.
Thanks, Annette! I had fun with the poem!
I'm struck at how lyrical the poem is, with several internal rhymes. It has great movement, vivid imagery -- what powerful memory after all these years. Maybe there is more here?
I love playing with internal rhyme, though I don't want it to be obvious. And your instincts match mine, Ronnie—I feel drawn to the possibilities in that long ago time in Belize. We'll see what (if anything) comes forward.
Beautiful!
Thank you.
Nope, just attended lectures at SDSU to listen to those who have .
Love this, it totally took me there!
You must be sweating! 😉
Transporting, and makes me wonder and brings me to the feeling of awe. What would happen if they wander away or return in the morning in a different order 😊
And there's the beginning of another poem . . .
Maybe houses on legs are an archetype of sorts....reminded me of Baba Yaga's house on chicken legs. I think it danced around, or turned in circles. I was fascinated as a child by that story as interpreted in Mussorgsky's "Pictures at an Exhibition". Now there's something to explore!
Ooooh . . . thank you!